Rules for Writers Chapter 17!!

This week I choose to write about chapter 17. Its title is Choose appropriate language. This caught my eye because I know im my own writing I use slang, and not the write use of language. It says when your writing in in a particular genre such as; reports, informal essays, memos, and so on, you should look at examples by experts in that field. A main point that they talked about was staying away from “jargons.” Which is a specialized language used among members of a trade, profession, or group. Jargon is mainly used to impress readers not to inform them. They are often hard to read and very wordy. They talked about avoiding invented words (also called neologisms) these are words that are to recently created to be part of standard English. For example, Bling and techno babble are invented words that might not last, and printout and flextime are no longer invented words, because hey have become standard English. Stay away from slang, regional expressions and nonstandard English. Slang is informal and used by teenagers, hip hop artists, or football fans. Some slang words are; cool, neat, duh, phat, awesome, and sweet. Chapter 17 talked about avoiding sexist language, which stereotypes or demeans men or women. Using nonsexist language is a matter of courtesy or respect. Also I learned to revise language that may offend groups of people, or negative stereotypes like; “drives like a teenager” or haggard as an old crone.” avoid these types of writing habits to stay positive.
I learned some very helpful tips in this chapter became like I said before I know for a fact that I use slang words when I write. And I learned a lot of ways to stay away from that so this is definitely help me with my future writing.

Rules for Writers Chapter 16

This week i read chapter 16, it's title was wordy sentences. This caught my eye because, i feel like i can really learn from this chapter. I thikn i use to many words in one simgle sentence. The first thing they talked about tightening uo wordy sentences. The right way to tighten up a sentence is to, tighten it up without a loss of meaning. They said that there is know need to say same thing twice (redundancies.) Also to avoid repetition of words, because it seems awkward. Antoher good point tjhey talked aboutis cutting out inflated phrases for example; "in my opinion", "i think that", and so on. You can reduce inflated words to a concise word, make the sentences more compact. Its good to simplify the structure, like strengthingthe verb in the sentence. Talked about watching out for colorlessverbs at beginning of your sentences like; is, are, was, and were.
I just really think this chapter will help me and im glad i choose to read it and learn about it. i feel like my sentences are sometimes confusing and need to be tighened up, and now that i read this i have good tips to keep in mind!

All I Asking For Is My Body, Part I

All I Asking For Is My Body, is told by a 4th grade boy named Kiyoshi Oyama. He is Japanese, and lives in Pepelau, Hawaii. Kiyoshi speaks many languages including English. He has an older brother who is 3 years older than him, and is in 7th grade. To different family members, friends, being at school , or rough housing around with his brother; Kiyoshi uses all different languages to speak to them. To his parnets he speaks formal Japanese, in school he speaks formal English, he speaks pidgin when he is talking to his friends, and he speaks pidgin Japanese when he is playing around with his brother saying inappropriate comments so his grandparenst dont understand what he is saying. Kiyoshis family grew up very poor, not afording shoes, bikes, or even a simple toy. But that wasnt important to them, they were proud of the way they were brought up and how they spent their money. A good example of this is when Kiyoshi would always hang out with his friend Makoto, and be at his house all the time. Makoto's family has money and can aford a car, bikes, and even extra money for Makoto to treat his friends. Kiyoshi's mother does not like how that makes her son look. She ordered him to not go over his house anymore becasue poeple may start to see him as a hoitobo (which is a baggar) or a chorimbo ( which is lower than a baggar.) People may think this becasue Kiyoshi goes over to Makoto's house to eat corned beef, onions and other food not made in his own home. Where Kiyoshi's family eats three times a day, and eats fish and rice. There was also an incident where Kiyoshi's father had a say in why he could not hang out with Makoto. I guess it was Makoto's idea to take coconuts which were not theirs and to sell them at the market. When Kiyoshi's father found this out he said that was stealing and to be smart and basically not be a follower. So then on Kiyoshi was not allowed to hang out with his friend Makoto.

“This is What it Means to Say Phoenix, Arizona”

The biggest difference from the movie and the written version would be in the opening of the movie, which was the fire scene, because in the written version thst scene was not in it. i really liked how the movie started with their childhood; it gave me very good information, and shows good details on how the boys grew up. i think that the scene and how Arnold couldn't save his friends from the fire was a big impact in the movie. It gave him guilt and i think led him in thr wrong way to becoming an alcoholic. Who also left his wife and son at a very young age. I just think that in the written version without that scene i wouldn't have really understood the movie. that scene made it way more dramatic, and you could feel the heartbreak in the movie where you couldn't feel it in the written version. With that fire it changed those boys' life's dramatically. they both had to grow up with no father figure and both had many of the same problems but dealt with them in different ways.
Another difference to me bewteen the movie and the written version was how they so differently protruded Victor and Thomas's relationship. in the movie Victor was annoyedand didnt understand Thomas and in the written version it didn't seem like their relationship was that bad. In the movie they took a bus ride, which they would of had to be around each other for a long time and got a chance to talk about their feelings and time to start a bond an a understanding of each other. While in the written version they took a plane, which wouldn't give them barley anytime to bond and start a relationship.So i really would prefer the movie over the written version becasuse it gave me a clearer understanding of the story.

Smoke Signal

The movie Smoke Signal is about two boys named Victor and Thomas, who are very similar in a lot of ways in which they have no idea. Victors father Joseph actually saved Thomas when he was little from a burning down house where Thomas parents actually died because they did not get out in time. Even though Joseph was a hero in that situation, he was very abusive to victors mother, was an alcoholic and left his family when victor was very young. After victor hearing that his father had passed away from a heart attack he had to go to Arizona to get his fathers ashes. He had no money and no way to get there until he thought about Thomas. So Thomas agreed and wanted to go on the road trip. Prior to this road trip these two boys did not have a strong relationship. Victor was very to himself while Thomas was very outgoing , friendly and loved to tell stories. Victor thought that Thomas was very annoying and weird. But through out the road trip and being together so much they began to understand each other and became friends. In the end victor even gives Thomas some of his fathers ashes and I think that was a huge part in the story because that was very thoughtful and brave to me what victor had done. Thomas was very thankful for victor doing that because of what victors father did for him! I really like how they became friends because I know how they is when you really are annoyed by someone and you don’t even know them. And than when you get the chance to really be around that person and get to know them your whole idea of them and relationship can change I like that!!